I suppose the story is supposed to be about the women in the foreground. However, my eye naturally is drawn to the bright shirt of the guy in the background. I couldn't care less what the ladies are doing, but I wonder what he's looking for.

This is funny. I wonder what the old guy could be looking at that's so much more interesting.

As a lowly male creation, I can tell you what first catches my eye in this image. Anyway, moving on, I wonder what on earth it is that guy is pretending to look at aswell, whilst he's really scanning the chicks over here on the right...hehe...

You've put in some work to focus our attention on the blond in the foreground, and pretty good work considering that it looks old school--like this wasn't done with layers/masking in Photoshop.

This has the feeling of a beach boardwalk scene. I like the goofy balk guy looking into the sun and I do wonder what the females in the foreground are up to. High marks, in general.