Lacks contras. needs a vignette burn particularly the foreground to disguise the irritating out of focus area. Pity could have been in the running, have another go.

This has the potential to be a great photo. The tones seem a bit washed out. I'd like to have seen a richer range. Also there's dirt (or whatever) in the top right corner that I think could have been cleaned up. The lighting is certainly dramatic though, so I've given good marks for relevance.

A part of me really likes this image but I find that it lacks a full tonal range.