Too much headroom in my opinion, and the front girl's cheeck is blown out. Love the second girl's expression.

Nice shot, but a little soft on the focus.

quick shot with some meaning, sharpness was off,

I like the concept but it needs better lighting.

Good tonal range

I'm afraid I think this is pretty poor.

There's much too much space above them and her hands are cut off.

It's poorly exposed and noisy, lacklustre tones, has no life and is soft.

Although potentially a good subject for b/w this looks like it was simply desatuarated with no thought to where colours would be placed on the tonal range.